Essay R

        After reading Essay "R," I would give the essay a grade of a D. At the beginning of the essay, it appeared as though the writer was going to write a well written essay on the changes that have occurred in wrestling from the 80's up to modern day. The essay started off fairly well by introducing it's audience to the names of popular wrestlers from both the past and present day. This technique was useful in attempting to familiarize particular people in the audience that are not familiar with professional wrestling. 

        It was towards the second paragraph that the essay became too informal and the author's purpose was not found nor supported. Throughout the essay, I was unable to find a thesis which immediately made it a weak essay. Also, the essay was poorly written in regards to the author's word choice and syntax. The author made inappropriate statements in his essay such as "they shoot WWE magazines constantly, and a couple of them have even posed for playboy," and "realized women could put on a good showing in the ring and gave them a shot." These statements shows women in a degrading perspective and I also believe it is inappropriate to write about how some of the female wrestlers were in playboy. That aspect of the essay in no way defended the author's view that professional wrestling has changed from the 80's as stated in his title. 

       The author's vocabulary was also vulgar in other areas of the essay. The sentence where he was trying to state that television shows contain a lot of atrocious language, it was unnecessary to use those words in his paper, "hearing a**, sh*t, d*mn, b*tch." This sentence was inappropriate and it did not relate to the rest of the essay. The author also posed too much of his opinions towards the end of the essay in such a manner that made it seem as though he was talking to someone as opposed to writing a formal essay. Lastly, the author had only one source to support his paper and it did not seem to be a reliable source since it was taken from a website. It was only the first paragraph that contained any citations and the rest of the paper did not.